Saturday evening I went to Chipmunks with my whole family. I got inside and it looked amazing! There were a play place that had balls shooting everywhere around the play place. My mum ordered food for us to eat, I went with my little brothers and played on the slide and then we went to the play place with the all the balls shooting around we had to miss the balls they were shooting and they had to miss the balls we shot at them. I went with my sister to this slide that went straight down why we called it the deep slide, when we slid down it felt like we fell from a plane that had crashed down. We came and ate pizza, when my older brothers were gonna go play a lady came to us like she was frightened and told my big brothers, "can you please get my son down from there". My brothers both were racing to the top they both saw the child and leaded him back down to his mother. I went with my second to oldest brother to a ninja warrior course and their were ropes to get past but I didn't manage to get past but my brother did . I went under the whole soft play ground and found a spinning tire I told my brothers and sisters to come and they did, we span and span in'till we were dizzy. We came back out and had a big drink of water, my mum said " that's the big day guys hope you guys had fun".
WALHT write an interesting recount. I am trying to add more detail to my writing and more interesting words.
I found it hard because I keep making mistakes. Next time I will add some more information.
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